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She does the dishes facing the window.

She lives in that backyard.

She lives in that moment
where everything is still, except her hands.

She stands with one leg bent forward, bracing herself against the cabinets beneath her knees.

She would fall faster than autumn without her habitual soak in the dinner’s water.

She wipes her hands on her orange napkins with purple morning glories, and sighs from the heat.

She shakes two sugar packets between her finger and her thumb, and throws them on the table swiftly, unused but ready.

Everything in her life is unused but ready.

She is anxious and alone with her coffee.

Her banana plaid skirt blends in with the wall, and she regrets her decision.

She is always found sitting between baby blue stripes.

She is April’s eye puzzle.

Eggshell is always her best bet, she thinks.

Her pearl earrings sag heavy in her lobes like full blue moons, and her jumper is exhausted.

She is so sad, and I am sad for her.

She makes a pile of crumbs on the table, bulldozing with her forefinger.

He hands are strong and wrinkled, she has dug them in the ground before.

She is lost in another window out of the dining room, praying to lie beneath one of the cars passing by, but she won’t.

Her husband is asleep behind his newspaper, or sleeping with his news.

She hasn’t touched a man really touched a man since Puerto Rico.

Her hands could use one more hot summer.

She brushes her overgrown bangs out of her face with the back of her palm, and rests it lightly under the bottom of her chin.

She walks up the stairs passed her family portraits.

She lives alone in this house.

I walk by her from the bathroom, and she winks with her left eye, while holding her skirt up from brushing the floor with h
I agree, the 30 sentence prose poem assignment has been my favorite by far. There was a lot of excellent writing done with that one.
hoakland 1/10/2008
Excellent work in bringing both an interior and exterior narrative (She is lost in another window out of the dining room, praying to lie beneath one of the cars passing by, but she won’t.).
Also, "her jumper is exhausted" is powerful anthropomorphism.
The image you chose gives a great layer to this work. We are lucky lucky lucky to be able to read so many beautiful 30 sentence prose poems by our fellow participants.
janicep-share 1/9/2008
I read this entry and instantly thought about my mother who also stands starring out the window towards our back yard. Often I have wondered what she is staring at or what is running through her mind I belive this answers some of those questions I have.
RickyMartinJr 1/7/2008
It seems as though your describing what we'd consider a typical house wife? Her identity is based solely on her work at home which is considered her job. Yet, she never receives recognition or compensation for it. Even at work we get occasional compliments on our work or our work is acknowledged, but when you put a "house wife" label on someone it seems as though they never get the recognition they deserve and in turn they feel as though they have no identity at all because how can you have something that others don't see or acknowledge?
Jassica-share 1/7/2008
I agree with Julie about how interesting it was that you did not include the name of Sarah's mother. It gave the feeling that she was sad and that she may have felt disconnected with people. The way you chose to describe what she physically looked like also allowed me to see how she might have connected with herself and her environment.
aalbert 1/7/2008
I really loved this, the way you used "she" instead of her name or title as you knew her really fit. She felt lost and out of place in her own skin, so became one in a number. It's also really well organized because it all feeds into one another. Did you get the feeling of the disquiet within her when you were over Sarah's house?
javillar 1/7/2008
My approach toward this writing assignment was to capture the identity of Sarah's mom, or how I always perceived her. I ended up getting to know her pretty well, and I always had the right idea about her. I never knew how she felt, or anything that she did, but I could tell there was way more going on behind her perfectly pleated pants and her perfectly folded napkins. I used this approach because she was the only person I wanted to relate to in this situation. She reminded me of my own mother in her nurturing ways, but she had a struggle going on within her that I never understood. I knew she was unhappy and it amazed me, because her life seemed perfect. I felt it was important to capture this type of situation because I have already commented on the father/daughter relationship quite a bit. I wanted to include the way she dressed because it added to the quaintness of her life that she grew tired of. Some of the things I wrote were conscious decisions and come were just natural. It reminded me of her, and I loved Sarah’s mom, I haven’t seen her in years. She was a strong woman stuck out of love, and we can all imagine how that feels. I wanted to use her as my character because she struggled with her identity more than I can understand.
hoakland 1/5/2008
while holding her skirt up from brushing the floor with her right hand.

She is far more important that I understand.

She follows the hall to her bedroom, tracing the paper on the wall.

Her madness is frightening, but she’s cool…calm…and collected.

She’s in her bedroom now, looking at her life.

Her husbands asleep on his chair again,

She does everything for two, but is the loneliest number she knows.
hoakland 1/5/2008

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